09-24-2016, 06:51 PM
Much better. It doesn't sound annoying now that it's mixed with other sounds behind it.
Now about the new part. Whole different story.
The new sudden added pauses segments. I think it takes the focus off especially since it's there far longer than it should. It's kinda like being ear cocked blocked. Your new revised segment sounds better now, and then that happens.
My opinion of options of that new pauses segment. Remove it, or if you really like it, keep the first 20 or 21 (whatever so the loop pattern isn't fucked) seconds of your new segment then change it up. Either add drums or bring back some attention. Simply anything so that it's not repetitive.
Now about the new part. Whole different story.
The new sudden added pauses segments. I think it takes the focus off especially since it's there far longer than it should. It's kinda like being ear cocked blocked. Your new revised segment sounds better now, and then that happens.
My opinion of options of that new pauses segment. Remove it, or if you really like it, keep the first 20 or 21 (whatever so the loop pattern isn't fucked) seconds of your new segment then change it up. Either add drums or bring back some attention. Simply anything so that it's not repetitive.
"Who am I to tell you something that you already know?
Who am I to tell you 'Hold on' when you wanna let go?
Who am I? I'm just a sicko with a song in my head and it keeps playing again and again and again and again."
https://youtu.be/bdJ7xe70ck0
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